Very good! Dramatic, and heartfelt.

She turned to look at his sad face, joyfully skipped over the grimy

I like that visual.. everything around is grimy, melancholy or sad, except her… i love the contrast.

Ah, that was sweet, definitely grabbed onto those heartstrings and didn’t little marionette-style tugging and jerking.

The imagery here is quite striking. Nice one!

Wow.. this story is breathtakingly beautiful! It fits the challenge perfectly.. You enchant your readers with your words. This story is pure literary magic!

i want to ditto alro613’s comment

wow, this was… amazing. WHO ? WHY WOULDNT THEY BE OKAY ? ahhh stupid one ficlet long rule! i want more of this so bad! lol
this was great.
too bad u can only go up to five stars..
virtual 1000000000 stars!
yay!

Such a wonderful, sweet little moment. Thank you for entering!