Was he surprised that she said you didn’t have to do this

Read it again and pay close attention to the names.

omg thats a burn!! Poor guy. Love how you set up the story. The imagery is perfect. I like the details you gave like the rose petals and the music.. the brightly feathered birds was a nice touch. Bravo!!

that’s AWESOME ….. so funny!!!!
Ya.. that’d suck LARGE !!!
Perfect for the challenge.
_LoA

ouch. poor guy

I second Sarah, and say…he needs to investigate this new revelation!

Ha! I didn’t get what was wrong at first, until i reread it a second time. I couldn’t help but to chuckle.
I wonder what kind of return policy came with the ring?

Oh, dear. Ohhh, dear. >.< That’s definitely a ruined moment. Thanks for entering! I had to read it over once to completely catch on (I’m a little slow XD) and then I noticed it. Great job!

I must admit, I had to read it over again as well. I like how you made it so sutle that you really have to pay attention to notice!
LoA

Talk about a crushing moment. I completely skimmed over the names the first time, but I had a feeling that was it. Ouch!

That chick’s a total whore. Does not deserve the candlelit dinner. Great job on ruining the moment!
One note, you’ve got an confused sentence in there: “Then she was opened the door.” I think “was” needs to be executed.

Thanks for the edit; “was” has met its untimely end.

made me remember At This Moment by Billy Vera & The Beaters

wonderfully ruined.
=]

Ouch. Missed the name thing the first read through. Really well done.

Oh damn… That has to hurt…big time… And I agree with John… Total whore.
God, I feel so sorry for poor Eric… He had everything set up for the perfect moment and was going to ask the big question…

That was truly a perfect moment…ruined.

Sucks to be him.

Enough said.

Great imagery and really great twist.