I detect a must-read series developing here. I love the tone you’ve used in both installments and look forward to everything unfolding.

So was this the original? Ergh, now I wanna know what happened in between “Remorse” and this one! But very good. Keeping with the style.

I agree with TBS (as usual) – a series like this would be great to read.

It seems to me like someone really enjoyed the out-of-order challenge.
This was another well done fic. I loved the detail about the clock in the picture frame.

great addition, I’ll give it a 5 star when I’m back at a real pc. IPhone doesn’t like the rating system.

Yes, this takes it in quite an intriguing direction. I’m curious to read more.

@John Perkins…yeah..I had a lot of fun with the out-of-order challenge. Had this idea while writing for the cop…actually outlined it so I know where the story is going, roughly.

I was hoping for a Lost type flashback feel, with sad Cooper in the present and active family man cop on the hunt cooper in the past.

I’m hoping it’ll come through more clearly in upcoming posts.

@Ben, I think flashbacks will be difficult to convey in this short form. Although I told your brother the same thing about multiple points of view, and he proved me wrong. I guess your family just has it out for me and my “predictions.”
I have no doubt that you’ll pull it off with aplomb and I’ll come back and say, “well shucks, guess I was wrong.”
Come to think of it, I said the same thing about the out of order challenge, and you’re the one who kicked me in the nuts on that one too. So, uh… nevermind.

@John…nothing like a good literary nut-kicking to humble a fella, huh?

We don’t like predictions, John. I’d shake a fist at you, but it’s hard to convey properly in text. :)

Anyway, another great piece here, Ben!

Nicely done, gritty and effective without being all overly dramatic and flowery…like I tend to get.