WOW !!! This is poetic!! This is awesome!
I’m looking for anything - anything at all - to critique – and i can find nothing wrong with this ficlet.

5 stars!! Fantastic. Best i’ve read today.

Truly an awesome story. The last line was awesome. Being a moron, I was thinking of this in terms of movies (though you did use the Say Anything reference).
The last line was really beautiful. Well done.