Cruel, cruel teacher. Reminds me of one I had back in middle school. Its a good story but you’re having some of the same problmes that you have in your other ficlets. Spelling, grammar, and orginization. What I suggest is go back and read it once its done and whenever there’s a change in scenery or some one talks hit eneter and just make a new paragraph. That’ll help with the flow and it’ll make it an easier read. Besides that you’ve got a really interesting story here, can’t wait for the sequel.
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