oh that is so sad.. you know you could continue this and explain what the dad had and what happened to the mother, but that’s your chocie b/c it’s good as is.

Yeah, this is probably gonna stand as-is. I wasn’t happy with it at first because it felt too incomplete, especially when compared to the great stuff everyone else was putting up on this challenge…but I like it more now that I’ve gone back and read it.
Thanks for enjoying it :)

I wish you would continue it. I think you have more story to tell here. Just sit on it for a while, wait for the story to unravel in your head, and it just might come to you.

@Ana: It’s possible. I might. But really all I approached the challenge with was the memory of a friend who’s father was going through Alzheimers, and how painful that was for him…and that’s where I wanted to be in this. I might revisit it, or…someone could feel free to take it wherever they want. :-D

I too am interested to see what may have happened to cause this. I guess that’s why they have that little “write a sequel” thing at the end.
You have a quick little slip into first person up there at the beginning. Habit from Bagman maybe?
Other than that, nice job. It does feel a little incomplete to me, simply because I’m expecting a beginning given this challenge. Maybe it’s a metaphor for life though. None of us have truly experienced our beginning, but our end will be excruciatingly vivid.

Thanks for the catch, JP. As usual, you’re the man…and unduly philosophical today, aren’t we?

Made me sad. Superbly written. Makes me wary of a possible future for all of us where we lose our dignity along with our mental faculties.