okay I can read it now! What a goofy glitch! Anyway, Really nice action, good pace, and metaphors! I think it would read better if you changed “but” to “because” in the line “But hate made the fire.” Sorry to make you edit again!

hey elsha have you been drinkin it does say because. Have you been hittin the sauce?

totally didn’t see that coming! you blind sided my ass(not the first time) and p.s. a”candle burning at both the ends ” is called a “eddie jo special” where i come from

totally didn’t see that coming! you blind sided my ass(not the first time) and p.s. a”candle burning at both the ends ” is called a “eddie jo special” where i come from

oh wow, didn’t see that coming at all!