Don’t give up your day job. And perhaps buy a dictionary.

A man who calls him self Wyatt Aapr shouldn’t be telling anyone to buy a dictionary.

A man who calls him self Wyatt Aapr shouldn’t be telling anyone to buy a dictionary.

But Wyatt is correct. Lack of quotation marks around the spoken words, poor grammer and punucation, and extremely bad spelling don’t help this piece. It would help if you spell checked your writing first. There are tons of FREE spell checkers, just google them. I would also suggest not using one long paragraph for the story. Reading a “wall of text” is daunting.

Come on, guys. Ficlets is for everyone, from elementary school students to published authors.
To ll find your work improving.

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What I was saying to the writer before was, don’t be discouraged, but keep working to improve your style. Wyatt and Krulltar’s suggestions are good, albeit a little negatively worded. The more you write, and especially the more you read, the better your writing will become. Keep working at it!

I wasn’t literally agreeing with Wyatt’s idiotic comment. I was agreeing more with the intent of Wyatt’s comment, that this piece needed some editing.

look im the person who made that story and krulltar your mean and im gust a little kid so maby i can’t spell evry thing right but who can so what ever you thing dose not get to me

just a kid

I like the setting, the plot and just the whole idea in general. Yes, there were some spelling mistakes but you have to admit, EVERYONE does that time to time. I like it and keep working on it!

yeah wait is this the storiy im soposed to sequel?? Well maybe you should try making paragraphs and i really would try to use correct spelling so people coulnt undersatand (not saying I did understand it cuz i did) If you cant figure out a word itsok just try your best:]

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I didn’t intend for my comment to sound harsh or mean. I was giving you good advice no matter how old you are. I feel you wrote a good story, but most people will not read it because of the spelling flaws. And that would be a shame because you have alot of potential.

Kris, maybe I can help you a little bit. I’m going to sequel to your story and maybe you can come up with some ideas! I liked everything about it, but if you worked on the spelling, I’m sure many more people would read it! I hope you don’t mind, but, I’m going to sequel on this ficlet! Keep writing!