i loved this. That he loves her enough to not care about his own self.

you may think of this as your own style, but you are not even following the basics of writing. Jotting this down on a yellow pad before editing it would be about right.

dude, really? i took english class just like you, seriously, i dont have a style and i understand that, thank you but heres the question
DID U UNDERSTAND THE POINT I WAS TRYING TO MAKE ? OR WAS THAT NOT CLEAR ENOUGH FOR YOU ? IM WRITING LIKE THIS BECAUSE I WANT TO MAKE SURE U CAN SEE EXACTLY WHAT IM GOING FOR , HERE, ILL USE GRAMMAR IN MY COMMENTS JUST TO MAKE YOU HAPPY . THERE, THAT ANY BETTER ? OR U KNOW , MAYBE ILL TYPE MY REMARKS INTO WORD JUST TO MAKE SURE THE SARCASM IS GOOD AND OBVIOUS .

i loved it and she doesnt deserve him….

lje