i really like this piece, it can go in a good number of directions plot-wise. good job with the details, too, you really kept on track so that the reader wasn’t lost.
the only critique i have is simply an error editing-wise;
“One of the , a boy named Wing,”
one of the what?
a good piece, especially for a first ficlet!
Welcome to Ficlets!
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I think he means “one of them,” but I’m not sure. But, anyway, nice first Ficlet, and, like One Time, One Chance said, welcome!

yeah it’s supposed to be “One of them”
sorry about that.