Good stuff.

Good stuff.

Nice job. I was a little confused at first I thought he was walking. Good hook at the end.

Awesome start to a series.

Can I sequel? OR do you already have a plan?

Hey! I’m new here, so I don’t know exactly how to comment you. Go for it! I’m dying to see what happens next. :-)

That’s a wonderful start! It gave me such a great idea. I echo X-Ninja! Could I sequel? It’s got great potential, and the ending line just gave me chills that you usually get watching a good movie. XD