Well done! It’s a really interesting concept, and ripe for sequels!

Very nice!

The strong emotions really make this an interesting story and something that many people could relate to in some way or another.

This is great, Khepa. As a writer, you have a clear and interesting style to what you’ve said here. I could read on and on… I think you should sequel this. If I get time, I’ll try to write one too. I liked this very much.

thanks for the comments, I am glad you liked it.