What the Puck?!?!? Tarzan?!? is that you?!?!?*

Did you get the name Oromis from the Eragon cycle?

Did you get the name Oromis from the Eragon cycle?

I think I did, but it was before I read the book… Im guessing my friend said the name, I forgot it, and then when I was thinking of names it came up in my head without me knowing where it came from.

Awesome title – it’s what made me want to read it. I think you could cut back on the color adjectives a little, though. It’s a little repetitive, what with all the “blue sky” and “blue eyes” and “blue abyss” and stuff like that; also, some like “large circular goggles.” Good, they’re large, but already probably assumed that they’re circular. I think it’s just the first paragraph or two that’s a little heavy on the adjectives. Remember what Mrs. Peterson said: “use powerful action verbs!” =)

yepp.. haha i did use a ot of adjectives.