My friend told me to use “big military words” in my title so that woud explain it if you were wondering.

A great portrait of a moment. Could be turned into a great series.

What an expression of thoughts! I love it. You are quite talented to be able to write such a scene. Funny…”big military words”…

I agree. Fantastic.

I really like it there was only one thing only unsettleing but you fixed it with the mention of the kevlar helmet. But I think you just want it as “a kevlar”