Nice job taking the ideas Bartimaeus brought up and turning them into what could be the beginning of a pretty good series. A few mistakes though, “or mabye we really beleave it.” beleave should be believe and ” life to this person and the piss on it” should be they piss on it. Besides that great job, looking foward to seeing if you decide to continue this.

very nice and tons of emotion in it. all i can say, which i’m sure you’ve heard before, is that someone or something will come along and help you up. Sometime or another. I promise. =D