Comments on Devil Pen [Sentence Challenge] by g2 (la pianista irlandesa)

wytherwings

oh… wow… that’s creepy
reminds me of Umbridge
awesome job!
- Posted 2009-01-12 05:34:23.
Wyatt Aapr

Great start for a longer story. It leaves us with more questions than answers. Good job.
- Posted 2009-01-12 05:34:23.
.:band baby:.

haha, I agree with wytherwings. I was totally thinking HP while reading this! nice job. i love the descriptions and the set up. thanks for entering!
- Posted 2009-01-12 05:34:23.
Mistress Elsha Hawk

definitely Umbridge! when I first read the challenge sentence I thought this too! it’s very evil, leaving the gun…
- Posted 2009-01-12 05:34:23.
chakatreatmentson!(LoA)

when anybody suggests I do something “Like my life depended on it ” this is my cue to get gone, exit stage left, do not pass GO or collect 200$ you see what I’m sayin? It never gets good after somebody sez that, so you have set this up beautifully, besides if people in stories acted in their best self interests we would have like 3 stories EVER …It would be Noah and that’s it, but in3 versions….
- Posted 2009-01-12 05:34:23.
RainDance

That last line was fantastic. The whole thing was great. Love it.
- Posted 2009-01-12 05:34:23.