Whoa, that’s good. Nice dialect!

Beautifully dark and disturbing scenario, and the allusion works really well.

Eerie.. zombie like,

awesome! I like the robber aspect, and the ghoul who comes to creatively interrogate and kill.

Ohh, I really like the persona you gave the man. Cool idea.

Nice!! I loved it…

I actually got chills! Perfect use of iamby dialog a jilllion stars!