This captures a very sweet moment well, however, there are some problems with the tense. Choose either past or present and stick with it throughout the entire ficlet. Otherwises, nice job.
blah, newbiesss… It was amazing bb. You could picture the story.LoA
its only two words that have s at the end instead of -ed. you write a lot of reunion scenes, but they are all beautiful!
its only two words that have s at the end instead of -ed.
you write a lot of reunion scenes, but they are all beautiful!
I was wrapped up in your story and didn’t notice anything wrong with it. Good Job.
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