What a jerk. I want to slap him, too, once she’s done of course.

Humm, does he know something the readers don’t?
Good Job.

I’m thinking the same as Wyatt. Hopefully, there will be a sequel. Awesom job.

haha, i wanna know what happens next

Great start!
And about your little “about me” comments thing, I love Kiss Me, too! However, it is so many times better by Sixpence None the Richer—I kinda think it needs a woman’s voice.

whoa!

the first time i read it, i thought you were talking about star wars (“Luke, I am your father”)

then i realized that wasn’t exactly right..