Its kinda sad… though there is a lot of hope in it. I think it is very well written. Great job ;-)
THUMBS UP =)

You could put this to music, it has a lyrical quality and rhythm. I like how you stayed on one seemingly simple description throughout—it’s neat and uncluttered and pretty darn deep as well.

Excellent analogy and interesting words. I especially like the “feed me those threads.” Nice and simple in language, deep in thought – how I think poetry should be.

Thankyou for the feedback :)