I’m pretty happy with where I switched tense (it was on purpose), and with a couple of the descriptions. Hopefully, it wasn’t too much. Feedback welcome!

Excellent…I love your follow-up!

As for why they went on a hill, they just knew everything was over, and it just seemed appropriate.

And, of course, one’s mind must not think well when the end of life as they knew it was about to end ;)

Your writing style is always sensitive, emotional, yet full of attention to detail. You should really read Carl Jung – he’d have a lot to say about a guy like you. Great work, Kev!

With great visuals, this story really works to convey the enormity of the moment and the emotion of the end. And, it’s nice to see someone changing tense on purpose and with skill, in a way that signals the arrival of the moment of the end.

Excellent.

“There will be no sequels for us.” I love this line, and find it perfectly appropriate for a Ficlet. =) Great job!

Wow, thanks, guys! Yeah, I’m rather fond of the no sequels line too… although I would like to see some sequels about the smart folks in the basements. 8)