hmm, a story all in one wish… all in one paragraph! I love how you draw us in with a fabulous description of the mall fountain and pull us back to the characters with the wish, suddenly giving them as much depth as the scenery. Awesome!
hmm, a story all in one wish… all in one paragraph! I love how you draw us in with a fabulous description of the mall fountain and pull us back to the characters with the wish, suddenly giving them as much depth as the scenery. Awesome!
Awesome. I love the contrast of her enthusiasm and his dead-pan, realistic descriptions, especially of the fountain. It’s clear what it looks like, how much magic and joy she sees in it while all he sees are the cold, hard facts.
Wyatt Aapr
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