Ooo! Keeps up the air of mystery.

I want to know the whole story too!

yeah, so do i.. thats where my problem begins

I really like it so far. The opening paragraph about names made me wonder what your character’s name is. Perhaps Frank Slain can talk about how odd it is that Joe Saint (or something) became such a bad guy, or how Joe Robber is such a goody-two-shoes.

Regardless, please work on it some more. I’m curious.

Brilliant.