comments?

hmmmm…… now what to write to sequel u w/….

interesing. the arch actually looks line a “n”.

Very nice!

Some minor spelling errors (e.g. “wasen’t,” “makeing”), but a great start.
I’d look at revising the first paragraph – there’s something about the “uncertain about the outcome” line that doesn’t scan to me. (Have you ever put one foot in front of the other and been uncertain about the outcome? If so, then why? In other words, either your character didn’t feel it or you need to elaborate his mental state…)
It’s a very good ficlet, though, and if you think it’s right, don’t change it on my say-so!

Lol, thank you again.

I like it very much. The idea is a good one, most definitely.

I like the idea. I also like the open ended question at the end. I do think the character’s feelings need to show themselves a little more, but maybe if there is a sequel more will be revealed.