I had to take out the reason he went in, because this is 1024 letters, but I hope you will put that together for yourself, even if by writing a prequel. Just think of the cliche “Kid in a haunted house” opening.

Riveting! I loved the line “fear was thrown upon him like a wet towel.” That is such a wonderful and original way to describe it.

lol. i loved it. it made sense to me too. i thought of several reasons of why he would have went into the mansion or whatever it is called, but i don’t know the real reason why he went in there. lol. there is so many possibilities.

spooky spooky stuff

This is good. It moved a little fast for me, but some prequels and sequels will help.

oooo, very Edgar Allan Poe-esque! I love it…the fast pace works, it definitely holds interest. =] !