ooh better and better, good cliff hanger.

Thanks. As always, I had like 3 or 4 words I wanted to use at the end, but couldn’t fit them into the 1024 character maximum.

Dude. write!! i need another sequel. o.O the tension is killing me.

very nice. you’re a talented writer.

Thank you very much!

You are talented…but this is bothering me. “Alright.” Alright? Just like that?? Why is this seemingly evil man being so nice? Or, perhaps, he wanted Dali to ask that question…but it seemed like a secret. Why would he give it up so readily?

It’s not being nice. . . .just read on. . . .

Good chapter, but the best hook is your last comment.