A little rushed. Having them both not freak out about being told, “I love you” before even “hello” is weird too.

I disagree with Alexa. I think it totally fits, even if it is a slight exaggeration, with how online relationships taken a markedly different course than real ones. I don’t know how many times I’ve seen people “fall in love” while chatting over the course of a few late night hours.

Yeah, i kinda ran out of space and wanted them to be in love since its a romance, not my genre obviously .. Thx i’m glad you got the concept.

Ok i changed the sappy ending, for those who read it before the ending went something like this: “I love you”,Emerson said. “I love you too, i feel asi f ive known you all my life”, said Rachelle. They stared into each others eyes.

Sappy like i said. Ty Thx that you liked the original. I hope this is to your liking.

Yeah, I like this one just a little better ending-wise. Also, I think it is one of your better ficlets (though the Toliver ones were possibly my favorites) and I liked it. Some sentences could maybe use a ”?” or two. Interrogative, statement, imperative, all that boring stuff.

Stovo, took your advice with the ? marks. thx. Always appreciate your input!

I prefer this ending over the other. I think it’s better to go subtle and realistic with the romance as opposed to pure sugar. But then again, writing romance scares me…

i agree, cant go too sappy. thanx for the input.

OMG have you been lurking around in my computer lol???

I think most ppl who meet for the first time after talking online have those nervous feelings…at least I know I did

hahahaha this is hilarious. nice work.