Hm. I liked the names of the warrior and villian and such….but then the rest of the story didn’t do as much for me. You had me and then you lost me. Good, anyway.

thats weird. Nanes are totally sweet though!

Opening paragraph was great esp the ( because other wise it was hard to find him).- obvious HP refrence. Last line about Bob was funny and out of left field. The middle was well…too much Sex, not enough vilolence.

Title was catchy and funny.

I loled at “Sex,” that section reminded me of Borat…
And I think I understand why Bob was amused. I could be wrong though. I’m looking forward to knowing…{Send me a note if you don’t intend to write a sequel.}

lol!
you confused me pretty often, but i like the names – hilarity!