great! this is exactly what i’m talking about!

Not overtly dramatic. Not my best, I don’t think. But it’s got the conflicting emotions, the unrequited love…And let me tell you: it is hard to fit a meat into a tragic love story!

beefy worked fine haha.I liked how you worked all the foods in, milky lips..and the apple being the only one refrencing actual food in the story. the others described things not being food in the story, so very well done.

I loved how you put the words in, and “beefy” especially. When you think of it in food terms, that’s kinda funny. =)

hahaha. beefy. yes, that would be difficult. nice job.

hahaha beefy
anyways would luv to see a sequel!!!

Is it really allowed to write a sequel for a challenge started ficlet? I wasn’t really thinking about it…hm. Maybe.

Excellent use of Petrarchan Conceits. Sorry, just finished a challenge on obscure literary terminology. I gotta’ dock you points though for not setting it at lunch.

Great angst.

nice job – i couldn’t find a way to put beefy in a love story either, though u did a pretty good job of it =]