That was . . . a departure from the original.
But your grammar’s much better!

uh…u went wayy of the topic

okay….

dude these kids are like 12 and 13. What the hell were you even thinking. If they were older, yeah, but DUDE !!!!!

its interest, but doesn’t flow at all with the rest of the stories. Linz really didn’t seem like a porn type of girl to me

i agree with penguincaptain. this isn’t like the rest of the stories at all, and this is waaaay out of Linz’s character. However it was well written, and if I didn’t know what Linz was like, this would be good.