hahahaha. i hope you’re planning on sequeling this. it’s great.
i love the creepy-mystery feeling throughout, then the sudden change of mood in the last line.

Neat, though I was giggling cause I had a flashback to a bad Adam Ant video. Neat idea.

My mind boggles at the fact that I’m not the only person around here who remembered the Adam Ant video when he came to that line in the story.

Ha, this was great. As always, lovely descriptions and style. I like it, and nice bit of humor at the end.

Oh God, Adam Ant…

Nice story.

Yess!! Too much fun. Now I’ve got the Loreena McKinnit song based on the poem stuck in my head.

I found this a bit late, but this is great! X) I think she should’ve taken the bus too. But what’s exciting on the bus? One does not get held up in such a manner as this on the bus. Very nice

i read that poem.. the highwayman… i barely remember what happened in it but i remember it was good and i think i’m thinking of the wrong poem (i’m thinking of that one where the girl shoots the gun or something… i don’t know..)
this ficlet is really good, and i think you should continue it!!! i want to know what happens

You certainly know how to paint a picture. Awesome ficlet, I could see these characters vividly.

Nice imagery, I agree with Tad. Sweet use of the character’s thoughts and feelings. This earns a commendation for sure.

heyy… i read the poem ‘the highwayman.’ great poem. this is a great ficlet to go along with it. nice. i like ur writing style. Hey! I really liked your story! It would make my day if you read my ficlet, titled “Residing Dreams.” It has many chapters, and it is coming along quite nicely. One tag for it is residing dreams. So just type that into the search box and all of my stories will come up. Don’t forget to leave a comment! I hope you enjoy my story as I have enjoyed yours. Happy Ficleting! TTFN .

I demand a sequel! And “Stand and Deliver” is one of my favorite lines I used to use it all the time! Good Job!