The Wrong Song

by SJHundak/S.J.Willing

Orange, yellow, white,
the box is way too tight.
The spectral shades
where energy fades
Somehow isn’t right.

Vibrant is the key
whether he or she
to make a note
of what they wrote
before death set them free

The tree of elder lore
the one they stood before
took all their life
both man and wife
drinking blood galore.

And so I end this little song
the trash mayhaps it do belong
But first beseech thee I of you
Tell me what mine hand should do
to make a short verse long.

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 4.5 stars out of 5

  1. The Wrong Song

    suzieaim's Buddy Icon suzieaim

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Great sequel – nice poetic extension.

  2. The Wrong Song

    The Dod's Buddy Icon The Dod

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    The “blood galore” had a cool touch to it

  3. The Wrong Song

    Witty1's Buddy Icon Witty1

    Posted about 1 year ago

    this poem is fabulous. I’m inspired by the classic rhyme scene I have actually never used that one before.

  4. The Wrong Song

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    I like the flow to what I think is the meter or something. I was a psych major and didn’t do so well in English. But what I mean is the whole things rolls off the tongue quite nicely. The End.

  5. The Wrong Song

    User 2302's Buddy Icon User 2302

    Posted about 1 year ago

    i got 1 word for ya’s: B-E-A-U-T-I-F-U-L u should b a poet

  6. The Wrong Song

    monster's Buddy Icon monster

    Posted about 1 year ago

    wow! thats all i could think as i read this. im not a poet so i dont know the terms but the first 4 stanzas? were amazing. lost me a little on the last one but wow!

  7. The Wrong Song

    YodaOnCrack's Buddy Icon YodaOnCrack

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    “Somehow isn’t right”

    I love that line. A haunting and celestial observation from the dead.

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