Great sequel – nice poetic extension.

The “blood galore” had a cool touch to it

this poem is fabulous. I’m inspired by the classic rhyme scene I have actually never used that one before.

I like the flow to what I think is the meter or something. I was a psych major and didn’t do so well in English. But what I mean is the whole things rolls off the tongue quite nicely. The End.

i got 1 word for ya’s: B-E-A-U-T-I-F-U-L u should b a poet

wow! thats all i could think as i read this. im not a poet so i dont know the terms but the first 4 stanzas? were amazing. lost me a little on the last one but wow!

“Somehow isn’t right”

I love that line. A haunting and celestial observation from the dead.