Brick Wall's Sad Attempt at the Shocking Dialogue Challenge

by FlirtingWithaBrickWall

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“Check out that sign- ‘Find out why God rocks’- God does rock, and my hair looks awesome!”

“Note the look of total disbelief on my face. See it? I promise you, it’s there.”

“Well it does! If I had been that blonde chick in Hairspray, Zac Effron definitely would have picked me.”

“Random much? Or more so- conceited much?”

“We’re both hot, and pretty people date pretty people, that’s just how it works.”

“There’s something wrong with you.”

“Zac Effron’s so hot! He’s on my list of things to do- er- people to date.”

“Random Zac Effron fact- he’s Jewish.”

“Ew. Now he’s off the list.”

“Wait- what? I just had to endure several minutes of Effronophiling, and you give me that?! What does him being Jewish have to do with anything?!”

“I’m Muslim.”

“You’re white!”

“You don’t have to be from the Middle East to be Muslim.”

“Yeah you do.”

“All right, fine, how about this- I’m gay.”

“That’s a little weird for me. Can I start calling you Butch?”

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Comments

Average Reader Rating: 4.0 stars out of 5

  1. Brick Wall's Sad Attempt at the Shocking Dialogue Challenge

    FlirtingWithaBrickWall's Buddy Icon FlirtingWithaBrickWall

    Posted 10 months ago

    hm… i think Pizza Hut has officially sucked all the creativity out of me…

  2. Brick Wall's Sad Attempt at the Shocking Dialogue Challenge

    White Hat's Buddy Icon White Hat

    Posted 10 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Hey, good try, though.

    And you format, punctuate, and capitalize readably! Huzzah!

  3. Brick Wall's Sad Attempt at the Shocking Dialogue Challenge

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 10 months ago

    I think you wound up with ‘random’ more than ‘shocking’, though it does seem like one of those odd conversations we old people overhear in a mall and think, “Oh no, this is the future of our country.” Cute and funny.

    LoA

  4. Brick Wall's Sad Attempt at the Shocking Dialogue Challenge

    emma jo_234's Buddy Icon emma jo_234

    Posted 10 months ago

    agree with THX 0477 about the “future of our country” bit, lol. Nice try.

  5. Brick Wall's Sad Attempt at the Shocking Dialogue Challenge

    someday_93's Buddy Icon someday_93

    Posted 10 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    I actually think it’s pretty good! I agree with THX , though.
    LoA

  6. Brick Wall's Sad Attempt at the Shocking Dialogue Challenge

    uselessness' Buddy Icon uselessness

    Posted 10 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    LOL @ THX 0477 ! True statement. I like the story despite its randomness. Am I right that the surprise twist is that she is an anti-Semite? Or is it that she is gay? The former seems real, and is certainly shocking, but the latter feels more like careless joke. She’s not really gay, she’s just trying to be funny. I think with a little more emphasis on the first one (what I think is the “real” twist) this story could be quite powerful. Thanks for entering my challenge!

  7. Brick Wall's Sad Attempt at the Shocking Dialogue Challenge

    scooby246282's Buddy Icon scooby246282

    Posted 28 days ago

    That is hilarious. I love how many of these lines are based on someone we know.

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