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And Then You Had Dinner

Dinner was excellent, though my stomach felt a little unsettled. At least, I thought it must, for it kept making odd noises even though it didn’t feel bad. If anything, quite the opposite. I felt a sort of warm, satisfied fullness that I couldn’t remember having felt for quite some time.

But I was in for a shock when the I got the check. “Why was I charged $50 for…’Appetizer: Waitress’?”

“That’s how much it’ll cost to train a new one,” my waitress explained. She sighed. “A real pity, too. Cindy Lou was one of our best. But I’m sure you had your money’s worth.”

I didn’t understand, but there was that feeling of satisfaction that few other meals had ever brought me, and it wasn’t as if $50 was a large sum of money to me, with what I make in a year. If that was all it cost, then so be it. It was worth it.

I returned to my hotel, went to bed, and had very pleasant dreams involving my first waitress—the one who had disappeared.

It was good that I slept well, for the next morning I was in for a shock.

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And Then You Had Dinner
Fyora Cartagan
Posted 7 months ago

I’m really looking forward to what you have planned to shock the narrator the next morning.
I’ve just realized though, that I don’t know the gender of the narrator?
So far, that’s my only complaint. :)
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Throat Wolf
Posted 7 months ago

Who says I have anything planned? Maybe I’m just leaving a good hook for someone else to continue it.

(Geez, I can’t write everything by myself here. If I were going to do that I’d go somewhere like writing.com where I didn’t have the length limitations.)

As to the gender of the narrator, well, there’s certainly room for people to take it either way. :)
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thebetweenspace
Posted 4 months ago

Very interested to see where it goes, but why does the waiter bring the check and the waitress answer the question?
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Throat Wolf
Posted 4 months ago

Because I didn’t proofread well enough. Fixed.
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SKermitgorf
Posted 4 months ago

Did he like eat her???
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Blusparrow
Posted 4 months ago

yes kermit, he ate her…. At least that is what I got.
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Storykeeper of Fae
Posted 4 months ago

Wait a second, I thought this was a teenager!
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Throat Wolf
Posted 4 months ago

All right, I’ll confess.

When I was writing the original sequel, and all its followons, I somehow missed the line about ”’rents” in the original. In fact I only noticed it a couple of days ago. Oops.

If necessary, I suppose I could simply write another prequel ficlet in which he’s a young adult stockbroker, and confuse everyone even more. But I decided to just play it as it lay.
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One Time, One Chance
Posted 4 months ago

so.. eating waitresses is a common occurance. that’s like.. whoa. =]
omg. the gender comment above creeped me out. this had better not be a girl!XP
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Nissakit
Posted 4 months ago

yeh, this is a good hook,, but I hope the parents didnt find out about how much his appetizer was…!
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flute faerie
Posted 3 months ago

This is a cool series. I can’t believe he ate her!
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Flute Loop<33
Posted 3 months ago

alright. I’m off to read the sequel…
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Alexa ♥
Posted 3 months ago

I’m intrigued.