Experimental Ficlet #45

by Mistress Elsha Hawk

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...as her scent and form evaporated before me, I woke from my trance and realized the horizon’s edge was lightening in hue between the peach trees and I was shivering…

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Experimental Ficlet #45

    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted 2 months ago

    I think this is the longest sentence….

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    Mask By The Moon's Buddy Icon Mask By The Moon

    Posted 2 months ago

    I think I’m the only one who hasn’t cheated on that rule. =dies= anyway, longest sentence ever… why is he shivering?

  3. Experimental Ficlet #45

    Blusparrow's Buddy Icon Blusparrow

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I didn’t cheat! lol, very long and GOOD sentence!
    LoA

  4. Experimental Ficlet #45

    Mighty-Joe Young's Buddy Icon Mighty-Joe Young

    Posted 2 months ago

    @mask.This is Prose Poetry so no rules apply here. And he is shivering because he was in a trance and time flew by like probation appointments and before he new it the morning dew had settled on him as the sun rose.

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    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    @ Mask, so go ahead and do another sequel! You’ve earned it.
    Elsha, this is beautiful. So much imagery in just one sentence.

  6. Experimental Ficlet #45

    [ wall.doll ]'s Buddy Icon [ wall.doll ]

    Posted 2 months ago

    Amazing imagery. It’s such a lonely scene, both sad and hopeful.

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    The Unnamable's Buddy Icon The Unnamable

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    My kind of sentence! Really well done.

  8. Experimental Ficlet #45

    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted 2 months ago

    Thanks everyone!

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    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Oops, I’ve cheated again! You’ve got sequel. ;)

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    Flute Loop<33's Buddy Icon Flute Loop<33

    Posted 2 months ago

    Ha, everyone that has cheated, more power to you! I love this Elsha! and who cares if it’s the longest?!

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    Smile4life!'s Buddy Icon Smile4life!

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    lol lets all cheat we can’t help it!!!

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    OrangeOreos' Buddy Icon OrangeOreos

    Posted 2 months ago

    Ah. I must agree with everyone above.

    This is awesome. It’s so strange how you can make such a sad scene so beautiful and hopeful!

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