Another Sense Involved

by THX 0477

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Keeping up the grin and general air of theatrics he began shifting his hands through his various layers of clothing. His mock look of consternation communicated quite clearly that he was looking for something.

Not wanting to see what he was looking for, I whispered, “We should move to the next car, or…”

“Aha!” he proclaimed with all the drama of a Vaudeville act, holding a shiny, blue marble between his left thumb and forefinger. I know my face twisted, the way it always does, into my look of confusion and disdain. My mom says I should work on not doing it. My cousin, on the other hand, seemed spell-bound.

“So…lovely,” escaped her lips as if involuntarily.

“Gwen, snap out of it,” I tried, “Come on, let’s…” This time I stopped myself.

The man was holding the marble to his ear and listening intently. The grin on his dirty mug grew and grew. His eyes, crusty and yellow, fixed on my cousin.

He crooned lowly, “Deary, deary, dear, I hear your future,” and offered the marble humbly.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Another Sense Involved

    OrangeOreos' Buddy Icon OrangeOreos

    Posted about 1 month ago

    “Aha!” he proclaimed with all the drama of a Vaudeville act

    The drama geek truly appreciates this line!

    And this man is getting creepier and creepier by the second.

  2. Another Sense Involved

    YodaOnCrack's Buddy Icon YodaOnCrack

    Posted about 1 month ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Written with your usual flair and I love the pacing of the dialog.

  3. Another Sense Involved

    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted about 1 month ago

    oh, a sequel, and using sight! You know I’m a sucker for details using the five senses so I can really get into a story! :)

  4. Another Sense Involved

    NightMaiden's Buddy Icon NightMaiden

    Posted about 1 month ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I love shiny things. Must take after a magpie, or something. : ) But, great descriptions, and equally great sequel.

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    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted about 1 month ago

    and sound, I just thought that sight came through better, stronger.

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