Okay, I wrote it in a fit of emotion. Not exactly autobiographical, now that I read it again. Sadly, I can’t edit it. I guess it’s more of a “wish-I-could-go-back-again” type of thing, kind of appropriate for a Hallmark card, or a voice-over for one of those cheesy holiday movies on the local station (especially the last line). Oh well.

reflective and sweet!! It makes me wanna write a poem so stop being so hard on yourself, I think everyone has a memory like that!!!! I Loved it!!!!

I thought it was lovely, a sort of snapshot of childhood, which I think fits perfectly with the challenge to fit something autobiographical into the space of a ficlet.

Ah, thanks! I guess it’s the stereotypical artist thing, never satisfied with the work they do and all that. Which, I suppose, is good. Otherwise we wouldn’t have a motivation to do better.

This was fabulous. You convey the emotion really well here. Loved it! : )

You can go back and edit, i edit mine all the time..but i see nothing in this ficlet that needs editing, in my opion, it’s spot on emotional memory. great job. keep up the good work and write more Luke.

this was cute and really nicely written,
nice job !

I agree with everyone else; the timing was good, the descriptions and style were good, basically all of it was good! Great reflection.

The challenge was to write about yourself, and in that aspect you certainly succeeded. You captured my attention with your memories and tugged at my heartstrings with your somber ending. It was real, and that is what made it amazing.

i really liked it, i agree with kermitgorf, that nothing needs editing!!! it was great =]