your story is wonderfully descriptive, and, you have nice comma usage (hooraw!). Nice job writing suspense :D broad grin

thanks, blossom. :)
and i just wanted to say to everybody reading this…
yes, i know that the narrator is no longer aibfinnia. i decided that since she is unconscious at this point and hereby a prop, i should offer a different perspective of the story. so until she wakes up, you’ll get the other passengers’ points of view. :)

Poor Abbi! Dang Rainn can’t you keep your woman concious for a least a minute?

ooo, suspenseful! ;-)
LoA

wow, i wanna know what he had to say! and why none of the rocks hit him! and why won’t his card work.. and who’s voice! ah the suspense!!
LoA

oh, nice job =)