This story seems to kind of ramble on. And ending mid-sentence really knocks points off. I’m interested in the blue jeans and the washing machine, so you’ve got an interesting story going here. It’s just… off? It’s missing a certain flow that I believe comes from possibly being rushed?

Genius with a poor memory perhaps. I thought the whole girl genius idea was really cute!

Sorry about ending mid-sentence. i ran out of word space & (you were right) i didnt have time to write the sequel. But hopefully I’ll be able to post it soon.

This is really good. I like it. Keep on going. I really want to hear more! Read my stories!

LoA