Some really vivid, gorgeous imagery here. I love the first stanza in particular.
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O Very dark, black, gothic, and vampire. To me it is a different direction from what you usually do. I like it! Very boo!
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That’s really really good. Disturbing and dark. Vivid and well written. Thanks for entering!

Very eloquent. Enjoyed the dark and gothic feel. well done.
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great take on the challenge. Impressively large scope and feel.

I try to coil god’s hand, and make it go numb> awesome line, Ilike that each sentence starts with I.. makes it personal

wow, this was REALLY good! I like it alot.
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Each and every line in this is vivid and full of beautiful, haunting imagery. I don’t know why I keep being surprised by the sheer quality of the ficlets you write.