That was sweet, one of the better pick up lines I’ve seen. Think it would really work. Nice message to it.

The parallel structure in this piece is used to great effect. And THX is right (cuando no?!), that pick-up line is the best pick-up line in history.

I like the imagery of them stepping out of the crowd together! That’s what made this beautiful!

This story is simply adorable. The ending is sweet with its metaphoric ending.. Good job!

Great use of repetition. Nice little story.

awwwwwww! that is the best pickup line i have ever.. um.. seen? lol
nice use of repitition.
love it : ]

Very enjoyable. Thank you for entering!