awesome metaphors and similies! Some spacing between paragraphs would make this easier to read. Spaces between the dialogue would help too. I love the tough guy attitude, the ominous half-threat, almost like he’s making it up. This also has a legendary feel too, like an epic story is coming and since I see you’ve written it as a series I’ve a feeling I’m in for an epic story! Congrats on spelling this time, even without your wife looking over your shoulder! Great last line, but it needs some quotation marks
O.k. so rule #1 is always don’t F@#K with people with face tattoos like ever, in any way, for any reason. Don’t date, buy dope from , talk too, obviously ignore, hangout with or in any way have any superfluous contact with ANYBODY that was so ill fated as to end up going through life with a face tattoo! The only exception to this rule is Kat Von d , because she’s a girl and has the only cute face tattoo in the history of face tattoos.Maori’s I’m talking to you.
That being sed, if people actually followed this rule ,while the world would be a better place,it would also be considerably duller.Also this awesome story wouldn’t of happened and what not. BUT don’t mess with Mike Tyson or anybody else with a face tattoo-I’m talking to all you tweeners and teens on this sight as the voice of (way too much) EXPERIENCE ! That being sed great story!!!!!
@N555champ /\and/\ X-Ninja so one of ya’ll is the person this story is about and the other is the one that fell in love with him that is tight i knew this story was true and i channeled it
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