Nicely written.

ooh i like this. nice job! very intriguing.

Great visual, made me think of a combination of ‘The Worse Christmas Pageant Ever’, The Pussy Cat Dolls, and ‘Reality Bites’.

Hmm, seems to be almost a deadly cat-and-mouse. Reminds me of my (yes, I am about to insert a shameless plug here – incredibly, disgustingly, achingly shameless) series with Laine about Burtininkas Richards the magician and his murderous assistant, Wednesday Thomas. Anyway, very nice descriptions and characters. :)