Good capture of an instant of thoughts, with an ending begging for a sequel. Plus, you got me Googling.

Wow, this is really awesome. Great job!

i dont get it

that’s funny ^-

wow i like this this is really good

Whoa. Great setup.

I really like it. I can see the resemblence between the prose of Chuck’s and your prose.

Interesting thoughts – liked this.

i really liked this… loved the last sentence, sucks the reader in…

Wow, great work. It’s alluring and leaves you begging for more. You have a great style of writing, keep it up.

It kept me entertained the whole way, and shocked me at the end. Definitely one of my favorite works here.

that was really good. how did you find all that stuff out? or did you make it up?

i don’t really like saying that i made stuff up, i imagined it being real. thinking about it that way helps you feel like what you’re writing is true and therefore you write it more realisticly.

but yes, i made it up =]

This story was the first Ficlet I ever read, so I blame whole addiction on you.
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Love how it starts off like you’re just thinking in general terms and then winds up with a gun pointed at your narrator’s head.