Great job with the kids’ style interaction throughout, and a bit of a morality tale as well. Kids, all you kids out there! Read this and don’t play with guns. Leave that to us grown ups…grown ups in uniform that is.

Or for people like me that took hunter safety and would use it for hunting! There really is no playing around when it comes to guns. There really isn’t. All it takes is one mistake, just one and your life could change.
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Woah, that could have been bad! Guns are bad news, lesson learned.
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This reminded me of that scene in Stand By Me when Chris was showing Gordie the gun he brought and when it went off and shot a trash can it scared the crap out of them.

You did a great job with the dialogue in this and it’s definitely a scary little life lesson. Off-topic a bit but I’m having a hard time getting the ratings to work for me. I’m clicking the stars but nothing’s happening. I’ll come back and rate it when it starts working again.

oh wow, they’re a little immature..but this describes half the teenage population..but guns aren’t something to be toying with..so this sends out a good message.

Holy crap, KermitGorf, what an opener!! Not many people have a knack for dialog like this. Wow! – Yoda

ha ha I know what movie this reminds me of.. Cute story.. Ya had ta change the names but I got the drift. Love that movie btw.. Thats the pic too of Jerry O connel isn’t it?

I see a feature story in the making

This is why guns and even bows and arrows, unsettle me. Especially in adolescent hands. Wonderful job. I was scared.
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I agree with Howhardlifeis they are immature.

a scary situation very well depicted. Nice job!

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omg i touched a gun once.. Now I Never will again i swear.. scared me even tho this was funny.. kinda.. well the dialog is.

I have no disire what-so-ever to be even near a gun.. they are just so.. dangerous! Very nice story though.

I don’t think I’m ever going to touch a gun again either!

Kinda scary to think of what the consequences could have been…

guns are so scary, i mean you never know what could happen. i dont think i’m ever gonna touch a gun again either!

I never want to see a gun, I never want to touch one, I never want to fire one!
I REALLY DONT WANT TO !
I never have and I never will!

Though nearly every comment repeats just about exactly what I’m going to say, I’m just going to say that guns are cold and unfeeling in their deadliness. It only takes a few muscles to quickly and efficiently end one’s life. Very nice job depicting that instability.

This inspired this thing:
http://ficlets.com/stories/23953

Great dialogue, characters. I shot cans once with my uncle. It’s a chilling feeling knowing you could end someone’s life so easily.

Great dialogue, characters. I shot cans once with my uncle. It’s a chilling feeling knowing you could end someone’s life so easily.