Excellent!

Wow…this went many different ways after I read it – controversial, emotive, both, neither? Point of view can really change this around, depending on what you think. Is the narrator benevolent or malevolent? It stayed in question (at least for me) until I read the last few sentences over and over again. Very nice job, anyway, to provoke such thought.

Ooh, crafty retelling of the garden, with the serpent as liberating hero instead of conniving villain.
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Are the ratings not working again? I gave it a five, then.

That was cool beyond words! I love it. An interesting take on the story of Eden. Very well done.
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I really liked this! It was part Genesis, part The Matrix, part The Cage/The Menagerie. Blink once if you agree.